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    GLOSSARY

    FYI - This is a HUGE, ~800 chapter story! So this glossary is going to explode, sooner or later. Just be aware. Also, I probably won't be able to finish it anytime soon.

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    B

    Battle qi - 斗气, a form of internal energy

    C

    Cayley - A minor clan in the country of Fenlai.

    D

    Dark Alliance - One of the six principal political organizations, located west of the Mountain Range of Magical Beasts, let by the Cult of Shadows. Opposed by the Holy Union.
    d'Bero shadow diamond - A dark violet gemstone desired by magi, worth 100,000 gold coins.

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    F

    Fenlai - The kingdom which Wushan town belongs to. Main kingdom of the Holy Union.
    Forest of Darkness - One of the three dangerous places on the Yulan continent.

    G

    Griffin - A magical beast of the fourth rank, hybrid of a lion and an eagle.

    H

    Hadley - Friend of Linley.
    Heishi - Main kingdom of the Dark Alliance.
    Hillman - Warrior of the sixth rank, captain of the guards for the Baruch clan.
    Hiri - Housekeeper for the Baruch family.
    Holy Union - One of the six principal political organizations, located west of the Mountain Range of Magical Beasts, led by the Radiant Church. Opposed by the Dark Alliance.
    Hogg - Leader of the Baruch clan, and father to protagonist Linley, and his younger brother Wharton.

    I

    J

    K

    L

    Linley - Protagonist of this story, the eldest son and heir to the Baruch clan.
    Lorry - Guardsman for the Baruch clan, under Sherman.

    M

    Magus - Term used to describe any individual who can use magic.
    Mountain Range of Magical Beasts - A mountain range filled with (duh) magical beasts! The largest mountain range on the Yulan continent. One of three dangerous places on the Yulan continent, it bisects the continent, north to south.
    Mountain Range of the Setting Sun - The second largest mountain range on the Yulan continent. One of the three dangerous places in the Yulan continent.

    N

    O

    O'Brien Empire - One of the six principal political organizations, located east of the Mountain Range of Magical Beasts. Northern empire.

    P

    Philip - A member of a noble clan situated near Wushan town. In sounder financial straits, he often purchases ancestral heirlooms that the Baruch family is forced to sell.
    Proulx - A grandmaster stone sculptor, acclaimed throughout the ages.

    Q

    R

    Rhine Empire - One of the six principal political organizations, located east of the Mountain Range of Magical Beasts. Southeastern empire.
    Rohault Empire - One of the six principal political organizations, located east of the Mountain Range of Magical Beasts. Eastern empire.
    Roger - Guardsman for the Baruch clan, under Sherman.

    S

    Saint - 圣, a level which exceeds the normal nine ranks of warriors/mages
    Slaughterer - The name of the ancestral warblade of the Dragonblooded Warrior clan. Sold off many years ago.

    T

    U

    V

    Vampiric Iron Bull - A large bull-type creature with blood red eyes, a magical beast of the fifth rank.
    Velocidragon - 迅猛龙, aka 'velociraptor', an enormous, dragon-type, 20-30 meter long, two-story building tall magical beast of the seventh rank. Fire type.

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    Wharton - Younger brother of main protagonist Linley, a member of the Baruch clan.
    Wushan - Mt. Wu, where the protagonist lives.

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    Yulan continent - The name of the continent where the early parts of the story takes place.
    Yulan Empire - One of the six principal political organizations, located east of the Mountain Range of Magical Beasts. Central empire.

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    Coiling Dragon, Book 1 The Ring

    Chapter 1 Early Morning at a Township

    The town of Wushan. An ordinary little town located within the Kingdom of Fenlai, west of the Mountain Range of Magical Beasts, the largest mountain range within the Yulan continent.

    As the morning sun rose, in the town of Wushan, there remained a slight hint of the cold, pure pre-dawn air. However, virtually all of the citizens of this small town had already come out to begin working. Even the six or seven year old children had already gotten out of bed and were preparing to begin their traditional morning exercises.

    On an empty area in the eastern region of Wushan town, the warmth of the rays of the morning sun passed through the surrounding trees, leaving behind scattered spots of light on the empty ground.

    A large group of children could be seen there, approximately one or two hundred in number. These children were separated into three groups, each group divided into several lines. All the children stood there silently, their faces solemn. The northernmost group of children were approximately six years old. The group in the middle, approximately nine to twelve years old. The ones in the south, the thirteen to sixteen year olds.

    In front of this large group of children, there were three sturdily-built middle-aged men. All three of them wore short-sleeved shirts and roughly cut trousers.

    If you want to be a powerful warrior, then you must work hard from youth. The leader of the middle-aged men, head raised high, hands clasped behind his back, said to them coldly. He swept his cold, fierce gaze across the northernmost group of children. All of those six and seven year olds tightened their lips. Gazing at this man with their big, round eyes, none of them dared to make a sound.

    The leaders name was Hillman (Xierman). He was the captain of the guard for the Baruch (Baluke) clan, the noble clan which owned Wushan town.

    All of you are commoners. Unlike those noble families, you wont have access to any secret manuals teaching you how to cultivate battle qi [dou qi]. If you want to become someone of worth, if you wish to be respected, then all of you must use the most ancient, most simple, and most basic ways of improving yourselves through exercising your bodies, and building up your strength! Am I clear?!

    Hillman swept the group of children with his gaze.

    Understood. The voices of the children replied brightly in unison.

    Good. Satisfied, Hillman coldly nodded. The eyes of the six year old children displayed their confusion, while the eyes of the teenagers became very determined. They understood the meaning behind Hillmans words.

    Virtually every male in the Yulan continent would exercise very hard from a very young age. If anyone slacked off, in the future, they would be looked down upon by others! Money and power these were the things that determined a mans status! A man without power would be looked down upon even by women.

    If one wanted their parents to be proud of them, wanted women to worship them, wanted to live a glorious life?

    Then they must become powerful warriors!

    All of them were commoners. None of them would have access to any of those precious manuals which taught the arts of cultivating battle qi. Their only road to glory was through exercising from a young age, and gathering strength! Bitterly hard work! They would work harder than those nobles, spend more of their energy and blood in strengthening themselves!

    When the sun rises in the morning, all things begin to thrive. This is the best time to absorb the natural energy from your surroundings and improve the conditioning of our bodies. Same rules as always Legs spread apart, as wide as your shoulders! Both knees bent slightly, both hands pressed down at the waist. Assume the Qi Building Stance. When assuming this stance, remember Focus your concentration, maintain a calm mind, and breath naturally. Hillman coldly instructed.

    The Qi Building Stance was the most simple, yet most effective way of exercising ones body. This was based off of the experiences of generations of forefathers.

    Immediately the nearly two hundred children assumed the Qi Building Stance position.

    Remember, focus your concentration, maintain a calm mind, and breath naturally! Hillman said coldly as he walked amidst the children.

    At a glance, he could tell that the teenagers in the southern group all were maintaining the stance calmly and breathed naturally. At the same time, all of them attained the goals of being stable and steady in their stance. Clearly, they had attained some degree of proficiency in the Qi Building Stance.

    But glancing at the northernmost group of children, with their waists and knees crooked at odd degrees, their legs relaxed and loose, it was clear to Hillman that they were standing unstably and without any power.

    Hillman said to the two other middle aged men, The two of you, take charge of the south group and the middle group. I will go take care of the youngest children.

    Yes, Captain. The two middle aged men immediately obeyed, paying close attention to those two groups. Every so often, they would kick the legs of those teenagers, checking to see who was standing firmly and who was not.

    Hillman walked towards the northern group of children. Those children immediately became nervous.

    Crap, the Head Monster is coming! A golden-haired child with large, bright eyes named Hadley (Hadeli) said in a low voice.

    Hillman strode into the midst of the children. Staring at them, his face was cold, but in his heart, he was sighing. These kids are just too young. They are just too lacking in both wisdom and strength. I cant demand too much from them. However, its still good to get them exercising from a young age. If they work hard from a young age, in the future, when they are on the battlefield, they will have a higher chance of survival.

    And to teach young childrengetting them interested was the most effective way! If he forced them too hard, it would have the opposite effect!

    All of you, stand firm! Hillman coldly harrumphed.

    Immediately, all of the children straightened, sticking out their chests and staring straight ahead.

    A hint of a smile played at Hillmans lips. He then moved to the front and took off his shirt. The lines running across the powerful muscles on his body made the eyes pop out of all of the kids. Even the children in the middle group and southern group couldnt help but stare at him, admiring his physique.

    Aside from his perfect musculature, on Hillmans bare upper body, there were countless knife scars, sword scars, and dozens of other old wounds. All of the children stared at those wounds, their eyes shining.

    Knife scars. Sword scars. These were a mans medals!

    In their hearts, they were filled with veneration towards Hillman. Hillman, a mighty warrior of the sixth rank, a warrior birthed from life and death struggles! Even in large cities, he would be an amazing individual. In the tiny town of Wushan, he was a man who every single person venerated.

    Seeing the ardent gazes of the children, Hillman couldnt help but let a slight smile escape. He wanted to stir up a feeling of worshipfulness in the children, a desire to be like him. That way, they would work harder and be more motivated!

    Lets add some more fuel to the fire! Hillman secretly grinned, then walked in front of a giant boulder, which weighed three or four hundred pounds.

    With one hand, Hillman grabbed the boulder. In a very relaxed manner, he began brandishing it about. That three hundred pound boulder, in Hillmans hands, seemed to be as light as wood. All of those childrens jaws dropped, and their eyes widened.

    Too light! Lorry (Luorui), if you have some free time after training, go and get some larger boulders for me. With a casual toss, Hillman sent the boulder flying several dozen meters. Crash! It smote the ground next to a large tree, and the entire ground trembled. Hillman casually walked in front of some random stones.

    Hah!

    Hillman breathed deeply. All of the veins on his muscular body popped out prominently, as Hillman directly struck at a nearby bluish boulder. His fist shattered the air, creating a howling sound that made all of the watching children widen their eyes even further. Hillmans mighty fist smashed directly onto the boulder.

    Crash! The sound of the fist smashing into the boulder made the hearts of all the children tremble.

    That was an extremely hard bluestone boulder!

    The bluestone boulder trembled. Suddenly, six or seven giant cracks appeared on it, as with a peng sound, it split into four or five pieces. But on Hillmans fist, not the slightest injury could be seen.

    The Captain is as formidable as ever. Lorry, one of the two other middle-aged men, laughed, as Hillman walked back towards them.

    The other man, Roger (Luojie), also walked over. Usually, when the children practiced the Qi Building Stance, it was time for the three of them to relax and freely chat, while paying attention to any child who decided to slack off.

    Hillman laughed as he shook his head. No way. In the past, when I was in the army, every day I would train like crazy, while on the battlefield, I engage in bloody close combat. Nowadays, all Im doing is relaxing and stretching my muscles a bit in the morning. Im not filled with as much energy as in the past.

    All of the children stared worshipfully at Hillman.

    That huge bluestone boulder was shattered by a single blow from his fist. What sort of power was this? And that three or four hundred pound boulder was so easily tossed with a flick of the arm. What sort of power was this?

    Hillman turned his head. Staring at the children, he was very satisfied with the childrens reactions.

    Remember, even if you arent able to cultivate battle qi, in principle, if you reach your bodys fullest potential, you can still become a warrior of the sixth rank! And a sixth ranked warrior, upon entering the army, can easily become a mid-level officer, and easily obtain the military manuals which teach one how to cultivate battle qi! Even if you cannot become a warrior of the sixth rank, and can only become a common warrior of the first rank, you will still be qualified to enter the military. Remember! If a man isnt able to become even a warrior of the first rank, that man cant be considered a man at all!

    If you are a man, then you must raise your chest high, welcome any and all challenges, and fear nothing!

    Upon hearing these words, smiles appeared on the faces of all the six and seven year olds. All of them forced themselves to remain expressionless. These words were Hillmans often-repeated mantra, and he repeated these words endlessly to the children.

    All of you, stand straight. Look at your elders to the south, then look at how you are standing! Hillman censured them.

    All of the six year olds immediately tried to adjust their stance to be more stable.

    After a while, the six and seven year olds began to wobble. All of the kids felt that their legs were cramping fiercely, but they gritted their teeth. But after holding out for a short period of time, the children began to collapse and sit on the ground, one after the other.

    Hillmans face was cold and callous, but in his heart, he secretly nodded. He was still very satisfied with the performance of these six and seven year olds.

    After a short period of time, some of the ten year olds in the middle group also could no longer hold out, and one by one, they began to fall as well.

    Hold out for as long as you can. I wont force you. But if in the future, you are weaker than your peers, then youll have no one to blame than yourselves. Hillman coldly said.

    Hmm? Lorry suddenly stared, astonished, at the northern group.

    At this point in time, many of the kids in the middle group had fallen down, but in the northern group, a six year old child had held strong.

    This must be Linleys [Linlei] first day at training. Who wouldve thought hed be so formidable? Lorry said, amazed. Next time him, Roger and Hillman also noticed. Looking in that direction, they saw that to the north, a single brown haired boy was still holding firm. His lips tightened, the boy stared determinedly in front, both fists tightly clenched so hard that his fists were white.

    A look of pleased surprise appeared in Hillmans eyes.

    Good kid! Hillman secretly praised. Despite being just six years old, he could maintain the Qi Building Stance for as long as the ten year old kids.

    Linley, full name Linley Baruch, was the eldest son and heir to the Baruch clan, which ruled over the Wushan town. The Baruch clan was an extremely old clan. Once, it was extremely prosperous, but after thousands of years, it had only three members remaining. The clan leader, Hogg [Huoge] Baruch, and his two sons. The elder son was Linley Baruch, six years old. The younger son, Wharton [Wodun] Baruch, was just two years old. As for his wife, when she gave birth to the younger son, she died in the midst of childbirth. Linleys grandfather also was dead, having lost his life in battle.

    Linleys legs were trembling. Although his willpower was strong, his leg muscles were strained to their utmost and were beginning to tremble uncontrollably. He finally collapsed and sat down.

    Linley, how do you feel? Smiling, Hillman walked towards him.

    Linley cracked a smile, revealing his small canines. Im fine, Uncle Hillman. As captain of the Baruch clans guardsmen, Hillman had watched Linley grow up. Naturally, the two of them were very close.

    Well done. You acted like a man. Hillman patted Linley on the head. Immediately, the hair on Linleys head became tousled like windblown grass.

    Haha. Linley grinned widely. In his heart, he felt very happy at being praised by Hillman.
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    Thanks for starting a new story!

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    Thanks, Ren.

    I've got some suggestions regarding the names:

    Town of Wushan = Town of Black Mountain
    Kingdom of Fenlai = Kingdom of Finley
    Xierman = Hillman
    Yulan continent = Ural continent

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    Quote Originally Posted by he-man View Post
    Thanks, Ren.

    I've got some suggestions regarding the names:

    Town of Wushan = Town of Black Mountain
    Kingdom of Fenlai = Kingdom of Finley
    Xierman = Hillman
    Yulan continent = Ural continent

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    Thanks He-man!

    Xierman to Hillman ; agreed and changed!
    Fenlai/Wushan ; I generally don't like translating place names. Wushan can mean Black Mountain, or it can be Crow Mountain; I'd rather not mess with it. Similarly, Fenlai vs Finley vs Fragrant Weed?
    Yulan ; I'm not sure where you get Ural? There's an actual flower called the Yulan Magnolia, which has the same characters as Yulan, so barring a compelling reason, I'm sticking with Yulan.

    Thanks so much for your input though!
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    After resting for a while, they continued their exercises. The training regime for the six and seven year olds was a lot more relaxed. But for the teenagers, the training regime was terrifyingly strict.

    The large group of children, including the six and seven year olds, were lying down with their heads and their feet each on top of a flat rock, relying solely on the strength in their waists to keep straight.

    The waist and the thighs form a triangular region. Hillman gestured with his hands to show the area he was describing. This area is a persons nucleus. Speed and power all come from this triangular nucleus, making this region extremely important.

    As Hillman spoke, he continued to walk about, carefully inspecting the youths to see if their movements were correct.

    Tighten that up! Your waists need to be straight! Hillman thundered.

    Immediately, the waists of many youths straightened. This was Linleys first day of training. His tiny head and his feet were both flat on the rocks, but by this point in time, Linley could already feel his waist growing tight and hot.

    Hold, gotta hold. Im the best! Linley kept encouraging himself. Linleys body had always been very strong, even as a baby. He had virtually never gotten sick. Given that he also worked very hard, for him to excel was nothing special.

    Thud! The first child fell down.

    However, the stones they were using as a pillow and footrest were only twenty centimeters high, so although the child fell down, it didnt hurt much. (In the Yulan continent, the goldsmiths used standardized lengths of 1 meter = 10 decimeters = 100 centimeters = 1000 millimeters.)

    Thud! Thud! As time went on, more and more children could no longer hold out.

    Linley gritted his teeth. He could clearly feel that the tightness in his waist had already reached the limits of his endurance, to the point where it was almost going numb. My body feels so heavy. Im almost unable to control it. Hold, gotta hold for just a bit more. By this point in time, of the six to eight year olds, only Linley remained.

    Staring at Linley, Hillman couldnt help but be filled with surprise and joy.

    Lorry. Hillman suddenly shouted.

    Captain. Lorry immediately straightened, awaiting his orders.

    Hillman commanded, Tomorrow, prepare some special dyes. When they are practicing their waist strength, put a branch under all of their waists, and dye the branches. If any of them slack off and let their waists touch the branch, their body will be dyed as well. Their training regime will double in difficulty.

    Yes, Captain. Lorry acknowledged the order. He couldnt help but let his lips tug up in a smile. He secretly laughed, The Captain is always filled with so many devilish ideas. Those punks are really gonna get it now.

    Wasnt that just so?

    Looks of pain appeared on the faces of all the ten year olds. Normally, they could still make slight adjustments and slack off. But with Hillmans idea, they would have no chance to do so.

    Hillman continued coldly, Let me tell you all, when a warrior practices his battle qi, the battle qi is stored in a fist-sized location directly beneath the navel. You should understand that this is part of the triangle I was talking about. I expect you all now should understand the importance of strengthening the triangle region! This is your core. If it fails, then your body fails, no matter how strong the other parts of it might be.

    A good instructor is of paramount importance to the children.

    And Hillman really was a formidable warrior. He knew the important parts of training, and also knew how to increase the difficulty one step at a time. He knew what sort of tools to use with what ages. If it was too hard, it could make a childs body collapse.

    Battle qi?

    Upon hearing these words, all of the youths, including the youngest children resting off to the side, stared at Hillman with wide eyes.

    All of the commoners were extremely eager to learn battle qi. Even Linley, this scion of a noble house, was extremely eager.

    Thud!

    Linley could finally hold out no longer, but he still used his arms to prop himself on the ground as he slowly rolled off.

    That feels good! Linley could feel that his waist felt a numbness which pierced through to the bone, so comfortable that his eyes crinkled slightly.

    How long was I able to hold out? Linley opened his eyes wide, looking around him.

    All of the six year olds had collapsed. Even half the ten year olds had collapsed as well. All of the fourteen year olds, however, held on. Hillmans face remained as cold as ever.

    All of you must remember. Your body is like a vessel, like a wineglass. Battle qi is like the wine! The amount of wine a vessel can hold is dependent on the size of the vessel. Same goes for the body; a persons ability to practice battle qi is based on the extent of his training. If his body is too weak, even if he gains access to powerful battle qi manuals, his body wont be able to hold much battle qi, and he still wont become a powerful warrior. Hillman imparted many important bits of advice to the children.

    Many warriors, due to not having received proper guidance in their youth, only understood the connection between battle qi and body strength much later in life. But by that age, there wouldnt be much progress when they trained.

    Many forefathers had gone on many wrong paths and gained much experience. Hillman continued to impart these experiences, like the spring wind imparting life-giving rain, deeply etching these important experiences in the minds of these children. Hillman didnt want these children to go on wrong paths as well.

    After practicing the Qi Building Stance, the waist, back, thighs, shoulders, and other parts of the body would be harmonized. Now, almost all of the children were sitting, relaxed, on the ground. Hillmans training program was nearly perfect in the difficulty levels he assessed on each age group.

    Todays training ends now, Hillman announced.

    Wushan towns training regimes were regulated. Every day, it happened twice, once at dawn, and once at dusk.

    Uncle Hillman, tell us some stories! As training ended, the children immediately began to call out. Every day, after the dawn lessons, Hillman would tell them stories of his army days, or some events which had happened on the continent.

    The children, all of whom had lived in the town their entire lives, thirsted for stories about the military.

    Hillman smiled. He enjoyed telling stories to the children. This was a way to make the kids eager to train. Hillman had always felt that only by making the children voluntarily train would the children have great results.

    Today, I will tell you about the legendary Four Supreme Warrior bloodlines which everyone in the continent knows about. A look of awe appeared on Hillmans face.

    The childrens ears immediately perked up, and their eyes brightened. Linley, sitting on the ground, felt his heart thump furiously. The legendary Four Supreme Warriors? Linleys ears couldnt help but perk up as well, as he stared unblinkingly at Hillman.

    In Hillmans eyes appeared a hint of excitement. His voice, however, remained calm. On our continent, thousands of years ago, there appeared four powerful Supreme Warriors. All four of these Supreme Warriors possessed power comparable to an enormous dragon. They could wander amidst an army of millions at leisure, and easily take the head of any general! These Supreme Warriors were known as the Dragonblood Warrior, the Violet Flame Warrior, the Tigerstriped Warrior, and the Undying Warrior!

    Warriors are divided into nine ranks. I, a mere warrior of the sixth rank, can easily shatter boulders and kick down a large tree! But a ninth rank warrior, even within our country of Fenlai, would be considered a top level expert. But above the ninth rank warriors are the Four Supreme Warriors. They have surpassed the ninth rank warriors and can be considered the pinnacle of warriors. They belong to the level of legendary Saint-level warriors! Hillmans eyes were filled with excitement. The legendary Saint-level warriors can melt giant icebergs, make the boundless sea roar with angry waves, make tall mountains crumble, make cities with millions of people collapse, and make meteors fall from the sky! They are absolutely undefeatable, the highest possible power.

    Silence. All of the children were stunned.

    Hillman pointed at a mountain to the northeast.

    Look at Wushan. Isnt it huge? Hillman smiled.

    After hearing Hillmans words, many of the kids had been scared silly. They all immediately nodded. Wushan was over a thousand meters high, and thousands of meters in circumference. In the eyes of men, it would definitely be considered a huge mountain.

    But Saint-level combatants can destroy Wushan in the blink of an eye. Hillman said firmly.

    A sixth-ranked warrior can only smash a boulder. But a Saint-level warrior can smash an entire mountain! All of the childrens mouths dropped, and their eyes widened. All of them were shocked, and their hearts were suddenly filled with an unspeakable dread towards these Saint-level combatants. But, their hearts were also filled with longing.

    Destroy a mountain? Hillmans words had a huge impact on Linley.

    After a short period of time, the stunned children returned to their homes. Hillman, Roger, and Lorry were the last to leave. Watching the children depart in clusters of three or five, a smile appeared on Hillmans face.

    These children are the hope and future of Wushan, Hillman said with a smile.

    Roger and Lorry also gazed at the group of children. On the continent, virtually all of the children of commoners had to train hard from an early age. Seeing the kids, Roger and Lorry reminisced back to their own youth.

    Captain Hillman, you are definitely much more formidable than ole Potter of bygone years. Under your guidance, I believe that Wushan town will become the strongest town in our region, surpassing the other ten or so towns, Lorry said with a smile.

    The strength of a teacher determined a places future.

    Oh, Captain, how do you know about the power of Saint-level warriors, or the Four Supreme Warriors? Lorry suddenly remembered to ask.

    Slightly embarrassed, Hillman grinned, Well, um, actually, Im not too clear about exactly how powerful the Four Supreme Warriors are. After all, they are the stuff of legends. Its been years since any were seen.

    Lorry and Roger were astonished. You dont have any idea, and yet you lied to the kids?

    Hillman smiled slightly. Although Im not clear about the exact strength of the Four Supreme Warriors, I know this a Saint-level mage maestro, which is to say a mage which has attained the Saint-level, can execute forbidden magical techniques and eradicate an entire army of tens of thousands, or an entire city. Since Saint-level mages are so powerful, I expect that Saint-level warriors cant be that much weaker.

    More importantly, the reason I told the children these stories was to make them work harder. Couldnt you tell how amazed those children were after hearing the stories? Hillman smiled delightedly.

    Lorry and Roger were both speechless.

    ..

    See ya later, Ley!

    See ya, Hadley!

    Bidding farewell to his good friend Hadley, Linley went back, alone, to his home. After walking for a while, he saw the Baruch estates.

    The amount of land the Baruch manor was built upon was actually quite large. Moss was growing on the walls, and all sorts of ivy creepers twined up the walls as well. The scars of time were very apparent on the walls. The Baruch manor located in Wushan town was the ancestral home of the Baruch clan. An ancestral home which had existed for over five thousand years and endured countless renovations continued to stand here.

    But, with the decline in the clans fortunes, the Baruch clans finances had taken a turn for the worse as well. Towards the end, it could only consume its previous gains. Over a hundred years ago, the then-leader of the Baruch clan determined that all the members of the clan would live in the front courtyard, which took up a third of the space of the manor. The rest of the manor would no longer be maintained. That way, a great deal of money could be saved.

    But despite these measures, by this period in time, Linleys father, Hogg Baruch, still needed to sell off family possessions in order to keep the family afloat.

    The towering doors to the manor were open.

    Saint-level warriors? While walking, Linley was still thinking about that. In the future, will I be able to become a Saint-level warrior?

    Linley. Hillmans voice sounded from behind him. Hillman, Roger, and Lorry had finally caught up to him.

    Linley turned around and immediately said happily, Uncle Hillman!

    Following this, Linley sucked in a deep breath. Raising his head to look at Hillman, his voice filled with eagerness, he said, Uncle Hillman, are Saint-level warriors really that powerful? Then what about me? Is it possible that I will become a Saint-level warrior? In Linleys heart, there was a desire which all children possess.

    Hillman was stunned. Besides him, Roger and Lorry were also speechless.

    A Saint-level warrior?

    This kid really has the daring to dream big. The country of Fenlai has millions of citizens, but even so, after countless centuries, it hasnt produced a single Saint-level warrior. To want to become a Saint-level warrior In Hillmans mind, he fully understood how difficult it was to become a Saint-level warrior.

    It required someone to work extremely hard from a young age, the support of a noble clan, and also a high amount of natural talent. It also required luck. How could it be easy to become a Saint-level warrior?

    Hillman knew quite well how much he himself had to suffer in order to become a sixth-ranked warrior, and how many life-and-death battles he had to experience. Even a warrior of the sixth rank was very difficult to become. A seventh, eighth, and ninth ranked warrior was of course only harder. As for a Saint-level warrior? Even in his dreams, Hillman didnt dare imagine himself as one.

    But he was facing Linleys earnest gaze.

    Linley, Uncle Hillman has faith in you. Im sure youll become a Saint-level warrior. Staring at Linley, Hillman spoke firmly. These words of encouragement caused Linleys eyes to shine. In Linleys heart, as well, a desire arose.

    A desire which had never been so ardent!

    Uncle Hillman, from tomorrow onwards, can I participate in the training sessions with the ten year olds? Linley suddenly asked.

    Hillman, Roger, and Lorry all stared at Linley in surprise.

    My lord father always told me, if you want to become a man without peer, then you must work harder than other men. Linley unconsciously mimicked his fathers manner of speech.

    Hillman suddenly smiled. He had seen the results of Linleys training today. Although Linley was only six, his body conditioning could compare with nine year olds. He immediately nodded, smiling. Fine. However, youd best not slack off. Youd best realize that this isnt a one day or two day commitment. This will be a long-term regime.

    Linley raised his small head proudly. Self-confidently, he smiled. Uncle Hillman, you just wait and see.

    This was a very normal morning for Wushan town. Afterwards, every morning was the same as this one. The group of Wushan youths would follow Hillman, warrior of the sixth rank, and train hard under his guidance. The only difference was, the six year old Linley was placed in the central squad of ten year olds.

    BOOK 1, CHAPTER 1 END
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    Quote Originally Posted by Ren Wo Xing View Post
    Thanks He-man!

    Xierman to Hillman ; agreed and changed!
    Fenlai/Wushan ; I generally don't like translating place names. Wushan can mean Black Mountain, or it can be Crow Mountain; I'd rather not mess with it. Similarly, Fenlai vs Finley vs Fragrant Weed?
    Yulan ; I'm not sure where you get Ural? There's an actual flower called the Yulan Magnolia, which has the same characters as Yulan, so barring a compelling reason, I'm sticking with Yulan.

    Thanks so much for your input though!
    Your reasoning makes sense. I just posted the western names which IMO sound similar to the pinyin names the most.
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    Coolness. Thanks!
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    1) 7 Killers by Gu Long. Complete.
    2) Heroes Shed No Tears by Gu Long. Complete.
    3) Kung Fu by Giddens Ko. Work in Progress

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    Thanks Ren Woxing.. From the time stellar transformations was started in this forum i was attatched to xianxia type of novels so much. So i browsed about the author i eat tomatoes and read most of his novels (xianxia) using google translate.
    Among all those novels(I read) only coiled dragon is as exciting as stellar transformations even though both are two different universes and practices.
    Much awaited for someone to translate this novel and i hope you will finish this project.
    In this novel except starting chapters of book 4 i like everything

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ren Wo Xing View Post
    Thanks He-man!

    Xierman to Hillman ; agreed and changed!
    Fenlai/Wushan ; I generally don't like translating place names. Wushan can mean Black Mountain, or it can be Crow Mountain; I'd rather not mess with it. Similarly, Fenlai vs Finley vs Fragrant Weed?
    Yulan ; I'm not sure where you get Ural? There's an actual flower called the Yulan Magnolia, which has the same characters as Yulan, so barring a compelling reason, I'm sticking with Yulan.

    Thanks so much for your input though!
    Personally I hate the practice of translating names (humans, animals, places, cities, countries, etc). Now, in a story that happened in China (or modeled after China) then the translator should never be translating names, the names should remained Chinese. Likewise, in a story that's not happened in China, I also preferred the names not translated.

    The way I see Coiled Dragon (so far), it's not happened in China, so I think it's better to have all the names (that's not Chinese origin) in English. The way I see it, just pretend that a Frenchman wrote Coiled Dragon in French, then I Eat Tomatoes translated it to Chinese, and now you translated it to English using the Chinese text.

    But it's just my opinion, no pressure.

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    The thing is, the CULTURE side of this story? Definitely Chinese. In the next chapter, you're going to see an ancestral hall with spirit tablets. Definitely a Chinese only thing. Honestly, I want to say that the author wanted to make it feel western-y by using some Western names, but since he wasn't raised/grown up in the west, many of the concepts/cultural aspects of it are still Chinese-y. So it makes it feel a bit weird at times.

    Long story short, I agree with you for the most part, but for some things such as country names, there's no such country as either 'Finley' OR 'Fenlai' in the Western world, so I'll just stick with Fenlai.
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    Thanks for the hard work, would you be a dear and post a link to your raws? I think it would be much appreciated for those who are able to read it to read the whole thing. Great Job, hope you continue.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Rin007 View Post
    Thanks for the hard work, would you be a dear and post a link to your raws? I think it would be much appreciated for those who are able to read it to read the whole thing. Great Job, hope you continue.
    Here's a link which gives you access to all of the chapters for free.

    http://baishuku.com/html/10/10938/

    If it ever dies, you can just google the name 盘龙. There're plenty of other sites that have the full text of this novel.
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    Book 1, Chapter 2 The Dragonblood Warrior Clan (part one)

    In the blink of an eye, another half year had passed. Training hard and strengthening his body, Linley passed through the gentle, warm spring, the blazing summer, and the chilly autumn. The white poplar tree next to the empty training field of Wushan would always scatter some dried leaves onto the ground whenever the wind blew. The leaves slowly whirled down, covering the entire training ground.

    The sky had slowly grown dark.

    Today, there was an exceptionally large number of people on the training grounds, nearly three hundred.

    Todays evening training session ends now. Hillman smiled. Before leaving, however, everyone needs to first congratulate this next crop of children who are about to leave Wushan and join the army.

    With autumns end came the season of military recruitment. With the entire continent engaged in an age of warfare, every youngster viewed becoming a mighty warrior as a badge of honor. Naturally, there were also those who wished to become mages, but becoming a mage is an extremely difficult task. Perhaps only one person in ten thousand had the necessary qualifications to become a mage. With such a low probability, the average person wouldnt even consider it.

    Becoming a warrior was much easier. Upon turning sixteen, as long as they were at least warriors of the first rank, they could easily enter the army.

    Uncle Hillman, thank you!

    A hundred and twenty six children, all age seventeen, respectfully bowed towards Hillman. These youngsters normally did not attend training. They had all become adults, and had their own jobs to do. But since they had all been trained by Hillman since they were toddlers, they all considered Hillman to have been their benevolent master.

    Before joining the army, they all came here to say farewell to Hillman.

    Staring at this group of energetic, eager seventeen year olds, Hillman was filled with countless mixed feelings. This was because Hillman knew that all of these children were eager to join the army, but after ten years of military service, how many of them would come back alive?

    I hope at least half of these hundred and twenty six will be able to return alive, Hillman prayed silently.

    Hillman stared at the children, and said in a clear voice, Brats, listen up! You are all men of Wushan town. The men of Wushan town must straighten their chests and welcome any challenges, and accept no fear. Am I understood?

    All of those seventeen year old youths straightened their chest, their bodies ramrod straight. Their eyes filled with a hot ardor for military life, they all responded in loud unison, Understood!

    Good! Hillman stood ramrod straight as well. His cold gaze was filled with a military aura.

    Tomorrow, all of you will depart. Tonight, prepare well. I know how strong all of you are. All of you will be able to easily enter the army! I, Hillman, will wait here for all of you to make your glorious return to Wushan town! Hillman said in a bright voice.

    The eyes of those youths shone bright.

    Returning home with honor. This was the dream of every youth.

    Now, I order all of you, go home immediately and begin your preparations. Disperse! Hillman said in a cold, fierce voice.

    Yes sir!

    A hundred and twenty six youths respectfully saluted, and then departed. They were followed by the worshipful gazes of the nearly two hundred youths that remained. Tomorrow, they would begin a brand new journey.

    I have two more years. When I become of age, I also want to join the army.

    I really want to live the exciting, heart-throbbing life of a soldier. If I had to live here for my entire life, in Wushan town, even if I lived forever, it would be pointless.

    ..

    A group of thirteen year olds chatted amongst each other. All of them longed for that exciting life, a life filled with vigor. All of them wanted to accumulate merits and establish a reputation. They wanted to be adored by the girls and the esteem of their relatives.

    This was their dream!

    Linley, your father, Lord Hogg, has some extremely important business with you. Dont go off playing with the other kids. Come home with me. Hillman walked to Linleys side. Gazing at him, Hillman felt very proud.

    Linley was exceedingly smart. Under the tutelage of his father, Hogg, since a young age, he had learned many words and could read most books.

    Reading was a very luxurious thing. Usually, only the scions of noble houses could read. The Baruch clan was an extremely old clan, and it held a large number of books.

    Uncle Hillman, I know already. My lord father already reminded me three times. My lord father has never been so insistent about anything. I wont go off and play. Linley grinned, revealing his pearly white teeth, perfect but for the fact that one was missing.

    Linley was already beginning to grow permanent teeth.

    Thats enough. You are missing one of your front teeth. When you smile, you let the wind in. Hillman laughed. Go, go home.

    ..

    In the ancient front courtyard of the Baruch manor, after the family finished dinner, Linley was playing around with his younger brother.

    Big brother, hug, hug!

    Little Wharton was staring at Linley with a look of pure, simple love. Walking unsteadily, he extended a small, pudgy hand towards Linley, trying to hug him. Linley stood not too far away, quietly waiting for little Wharton to reach him.

    Wharton, you can do it! Linley encouraged him.

    Little Whartons wobbly footsteps made people fear he would fall with each step. But in the end, little Wharton managed to rush into his big brothers embrace. His smooth skin, as soft as water, was slightly pink. His big round eyes stared at his elder brother, and in a baby voice, he said, Big brother, big brother.

    Looking at his baby brother, Linleys heart was filled with a boundless warmth and love.

    No mother, no grandparents. Although he had his father and the family caretaker to take care of him, Linley, who had matured early, was extremely loving and protective towards his little brother. In Linleys eyes, as the big brother, it was his job to take care of his little brother.

    Wharton, what did you learn today? Linley asked, smiling.

    Wharton frowned, an extremely cute expression. After pondering, he excitedly said, Today I learned about using rags!

    Rags? Linleys face revealed an uncontrollable smile. What did you wipe?

    Counting on his fingers, little Wharton said, First I used the rags to wipe the floors, then the toilet chamber pots, and lastly I wiped.wiped.right, I wiped the plates! He looked excitedly at Linley, awaiting Linleys praise.

    You wiped the chamber pots, and then wiped the plates? Linleys eyes were huge.

    What, did I do it wrong? I really wiped them clean. In little Whartons tiny head, his eyes were filled with an uncomprehending look as he stared at his big brother.

    Young master Linley, your father is looking for you. Let me carry young master Wharton. A brandy-nosed old man walked over. This brandy-nosed old man was the Baruch clans housekeeper, Hiri (Xili). In the entire manor, aside from the housekeeper, there wasnt even a serving girl.

    Linley no longer had any time to chat with Wharton. He immediately handed Wharton over to Grandpa Hiri, and went towards the guest hall.

    I wonder why father summoned me? Although he was young, Linley could sense that this time, his father had called him for something important.

    Entering the guest hall, in one corner there was a desk clock that was higher than Linley was tall.

    This desk clock can be considered a high quality object. Generally, only wealthy or noble families had such a clock. At this moment, Linleys father was seated next to the fireplace. The flames in the fireplace burned, constantly crackling and popping.

    Um? Why did father change his clothes? Seeing his father, Linley was filled with astonishment. While at home, his father normally wore only simple very simple clothes. Just then, while eating dinner, his father wore normal clothes. But now, he had switched to a set of very noble, beautiful apparel.

    Hoggs entire body emanated an ancient, noble aura. That aura wasnt the sort that money could buy. It was something which an ancient noble clan cultivated in its heirs. A clan which had survived for five thousand years. How could an ordinary noble clan compare?

    Hogg stood up. Turning around, when he saw Linley, his eyes lit up.

    Linley, come with me. Lets go to the ancestral hall. Uncle Hiri, you know about the matters of my clan, so you can come as well. Hogg smiled.

    The ancestral hall? Linley was astonished.

    The members of the Baruch clan only stayed in the front side of the manor. The areas in the far back, virtually no one went there to clean. Only the ancestral hall in the back did they ever visit, once a month, to clean.

    But this isnt the time to sacrifice to our ancestors. Why are we going to the ancestral hall? Linley had a belly full of questions.

    Exiting the guest hall, Hogg, Linley, and Uncle Hiri, who still held Wharton, followed the blue stone path towards the back manor.

    Deep autumn. The night was as cold as water.

    The cold wind blowing, Linley couldnt help but shiver. But Linley didnt make a sound, because he could feel that something was different today. Following his father, Linley entered the ancestral hall as well.

    Clack. The door to the ancestral hall closed.

    With the candles in the hall becoming lit, the entire hall immediately became very bright. Linley could instantly see the many spirit tablets placed in the very front of the hall. That thick, dense cluster of spirit tablets spoke volumes as to the age of the Baruch clan.

    Hogg quietly stood in front of the spirit tablets, not saying a word.

    Linley felt very nervous. In the entire hall, aside from the sounds of the whispering candles, no sound was heard. The quiet was terrifying, creating an oppressive feeling on the heart.

    Suddenly, Hogg turned and focused his gaze on Linley. In a weighty voice, he said, Linley, today, there are many things that must be done. But first, let me tell you some of the history of our Baruch clan.

    Linley could feel his heart thumping frantically.

    Our clans history? What can it be? In his heart, Linley was eager to know, but he didnt dare to make a sound.

    A look of pride appearing on his face, Hogg said in a clear voice, Linley, our Baruch clan has existed for five thousand years. Even scanning the entire Kingdom of Fenlai, I dont believe we can find a second clan which is as ancient as ours. Hoggs voice contained an absolute pride.

    Ancient. This was a word which some noble clans viewed with great importance.

    Linley, have you heard of the legendary Four Supreme Warriors of the Yulan continent? Turning his head, Hogg looked at Linley.

    Eyes brightening, Linley nodded. I know. According to Uncle Hillman, the legendary Four Supreme Warriors are the Dragonblood Warrior, the Violet Flame Warrior, the Tigerstriped Warrior, and the Undying Warrior.

    Satisfied, Hogg nodded. Smiling, he said, Right! Now, I am going to tell you something. The Four Supreme Warriors actually represent four ancient clans. And our Baruch clan is the ancient clan which contains the exalted bloodline of the Dragonblood Warriors!

    CHAPTER 2 - END
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    Awesome!! Another magical fantasy! Thank you

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    Book 1, Chapter 3 The Dragonblood Warrior Clan (part two)

    The Dragonblood Warrior Clan?! Linley felt as though his entire head was buzzing.

    In Linleys eyes, his clan was nothing more than just an ancient clan which had fallen on hard times. How could it be related to the legendary Dragonblood Warrior?

    You dont believe me? A trace of arrogance could be seen on Hoggs face. Linley, go up and take a close look at those spirit tablets. By now, you can read all the words on them. On the back of every single spirit tablet is the history of those departed forefathers. The three spirit tablets at the very top, are three who are Dragonblood Warriors!

    Hogg took Linley by the hand. Come.

    Hogg led Linley towards the area behind the many spirit tablets. Lifting him up, Hogg said, Take a close look at those characters behind.

    Linley widened his eyes and began to read.

    The words carved onto the uppermost tablet were etched very deep and very clearly. Those five thousand year old characters told of an astonishing story!

    Baruch, the very first Dragonblood Warrior of the Yulan continent. In the year 4560 of the Yulan calendar, outside the walls of the city of Linnan, Baruch did battle against a Black Dragon and a Titanic Frost Wyrm. In the end, he slew both the Titanic Frost Wyrm and the Black Dragon, causing his fame to be spread across the world. In the year 4579 of the Yulan calendar, along the coastline of the northern sea of the continent, Baruch did battle against a Nine-Headed Serpent Emperor. On that day, the waves crashed unceasingly and nearby cities crumbled, but after a vicious fight lasting a full day and night, Baruch finally executed the Nine-Headed Serpent Emperor.finally, Baruch founded the Baruch clan, and became the first leader of the Baruch clan!

    Ryan [Ruien] Baruch, the second Dragonblood Warrior of the Yulan continent. In the year 4690 of the Yulan calendar, in the Mountain Range of Magical Beasts, he defeated and subdued a Saint-level Golden Dragon, and became known as the Golden Dragonrider Saint! In the year 4697

    Hazard [Hazede] Baruch, the third Dragonblood Warrior of the Yulan continent. Born in the year 5360 of the Yulan calendar, in his very first battle, he fought fiercely with a Saint-level Bloody Maned Lion in the Mountain Range of the Setting Sun. He defeated the lion, forcing it to scurry away and flee, causing Hazard to become famous throughout the world

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    One mighty name after another, one amazing story after another, made the blood in Linleys veins pump all the more vigorously.

    My clan, is actually the clan of the Dragonblood Warriors? Linley was extremely excited.

    Beside him, Hogg said in a low voice, The first three generations of the Baruch family were all Dragonblood Warriors. Upon becoming a Dragonblood Warrior, ones life expectancy would dramatically increase. The second generation Dragonblood Warrior didnt get married or have children until after he was seven hundred years old.

    And afterwards? Linley wondered. Father, why doesnt our clan have any more Dragonblood Warriors?

    Hogg nodded. To become a Dragonblood Warrior, the most important thing is the density and thickness of the dragonblood which flows in our veins. The higher the density, the better. After many generations, the density of the dragonblood in our veins has grown thinner and thinner. Howeverthat isnt an absolute. Because as time goes on, sometimes, out of nowhere, a descendant will possess a very high density of dragonblood.

    After Hazard Baruch, the fourth Dragonblood Warrior appeared, nearly a thousand years later. And then, after fifteen hundred years passed, which is to say tens of generations later, the fifth Dragonblood Warrior finally appeared in our clan. But in the thousand years from then until now, not a single Dragonblood Warrior has shown up.

    Hogg shook his head and sighed. The fifth Dragonblood Warrior only stayed on the Yulan continent for around two centuries, before he disappeared. In the thousand years since then, our Baruch clan has totally decayed.

    After a thousand years, even the most illustrious of families could decay.

    However, our clan still has hope. Perhaps in the future, one of our descendants will have the requisite density of dragonblood in their veins, and meet the requirements to become a Dragonblood Warrior. If they meet the requirements, after just a few decades of training, they would be able to become a true, full Dragonblood Warrior. And at that time, the Baruch clan would once more be restored to the glorious days of yore, when we were known as the Dragonblood Warrior Clan! Hoggs eyes shone. Linley, you are six and a half now. According to our rules, at your age, the test to see if your blood has a high density of dragonblood will be fairly accurate. Today, I am going to test you.

    Linley was stunned. Testing the density of dragonblood in my veins? Test me? Linley fully understood the implications of his father performing this test. This test would show whether or not he met the requirements for becoming a Dragonblood Warrior.

    Linley, wait here. Ill go get the Dragonblood Needle. Hogg clearly was very excited, as he immediately departed the ancestral hall for a nearby private room.

    Dragonblood Warrior? Will I really become a Dragonblood Warrior? Linley was mentally fidgeting.

    Standing there, Linleys mind was a confused mess. He was filled with both eagerness and fear. He feared that the density of dragonblood in his veins wasnt high enough.

    If I fail, I guess father will be extremely disappointed. Linley couldnt help but think. Having grown up with his father and his younger brother, Linley didnt want to disappoint his father. But the density of dragonblood in his veins wasnt something he could decide.

    After just a short period of time, Hogg returned with a twenty-centimeter long needle that was extremely thin as he walked out from the private room.

    Dragonblood Needle? Linley guessed, as he stared at the long needle in his fathers hands.

    Alright, Linley. This needle will just barely break the skin when it goes in. It wont hurt at all. Stretch out your hand. Hogg smiled, and Linley nodded. Taking a deep breath, Linley stretched out his right arm. The slight trembling in his arm showed that Linley really was very nervous.

    Not just Linley. To tell the truth, even Hogg was very nervous.

    Hold it. Holding the translucent Dragonblood Needle, Hogg lightly pricked Linleys ring finger with it, easily piercing the skin. Linley felt a piercing pain, and the translucent needle immediately turned crimson as well.

    Hands shaking, Hogg immediately lifted the Dragonblood Needle up and inspected it carefully.

    Raising his head, Linley stared at his father, feeling extremely agitated. Is the density of dragonblood in my veins sufficient? Why has father stared at the Dragonblood Needle for so long? Linley had a bad premonition

    Sigh with an exhaled breath, Hogg placed the Dragonblood Needle off to one side.

    Hearing his fathers sigh, the nervous Linley knew that the density of dragonblood in his veins clearly didnt reach the required level. His tears immediately began to flow.

    Linley, why are you crying? Dont cry, be good, dont cry. Hogg immediately hugged Linley. Seeing Linley cry, Hogg felt sick at heart. After all, Linley was still just six and a half. He was just a child.

    I wont cry. Yeah. Wont cry. Linley sniffled twice, then forced himself to calm down. Father, Im sorry. Ive let you down.

    Hearing Linleys words, Hogg felt a warm feeling in his heart. He couldnt help but hold Linley against his bosom. Linley, dont feel bad. I actually didnt raise my hopes too high. Over a thousand years and tens of generations, no one has become a Dragonblood Warrior. It doesnt matter that you also failed. Father doesnt blame you.

    Feeling the warmth of his fathers chest, Linleys tightened chest gradually loosened.

    By this point, the two year old Wharton had long since fallen asleep in Grandpa Hiris arms.

    Linley, at this point in time, the Baruch family just consists of you, me, and your little brother. I dont have any extravagant hopes. Ive never dared to dream of becoming a Dragonblood Warrior. Hogg laughed at himself satirically. How could becoming a Dragonblood Warrior be an easy task?

    Linley raised his head, staring at his father.

    Linley rarely saw his father speak to him in such a manner. Normally, his father was always very strict and unyielding.

    Staring at the rows of spirit tablets, Hoggs eyes were filled with a dreary sadness. My true goal is actually to recover the ancestral heirloom of the Baruch clan, passed down across the generations.

    Our ancestral heirloom? Whats that? Why have I never heard about it? Linley asked curiously.

    Hogg proudly said, Our ancestral heirloom the warblade, Slaughterer. This was the weapon used by the very first leader of the Baruch clan, the very first Dragonblood Warrior of the Yulan continent. Alashis descendants were unfilial. Six hundred years ago, because of poverty, a descendant who loved luxury actually sold our ancestral weapon for money.

    As he spoke, Hogg was filled with so much fury that his body actually trembled.

    Shaking his head helplessly, he said, Afterwards, every single generation tried to recover the warblade Slaughterer, but despite six hundred years of trying, none of us have succeeded. After all, when we sold the warblade Slaughterer, it was for the price of 180,000 taels of gold. 180,000 taels of gold! We arent able to produce such a vast sum, but even if we were, the current owner wouldnt be willing to sell to us.

    The ancient clan of the Dragonblood Warriors, actually had sold off its own ancestral heirloom.

    This was a humiliation!

    The humiliation of the ancient clan of the Dragonblood Warriors!

    Every succeeding generation had attempted to come up with ways to regain the warblade Slaughterer, but despite six hundred years of trying, they had never succeeded.

    As the current clan leader, Hogg also had this desire, but the clans economic situation was in dire straits. 180,000 taels of gold? Even if they sold off the manor and all their possessions, they might not be able to produce such a vast sum.

    The ancestral heirloom was lost. This humiliation constantly weighed on Hoggs heart. He felt ashamed and helpless, and unable to face his forefathers.

    Seeing the look on his fathers face, Linley consoled him, Father, dont be unhappy! I promise that one day, I will recover our familys heirloom and bring it back to this manor.

    You? Hogg chuckled. Eyes filled with love, he ruffled Linleys hair.

    In his heart, Hogg secretly said, Linley. Do you know, these words you just saidall those years ago, I said these same words to your grandfather as well. Six hundred years of efforts had all failed. How could it be easy to accomplish? After all, the person who had purchased the warblade Slaughterer couldnt be any ordinary person.

    Why would they be willing to sell?

    Even if they were willing to sell, how could the decrepit Baruch clan afford the cost?

    Father, you dont believe me? Raising his head, Linley looked at his father questioningly.

    I believe you, I believe you, Hogg laughed.

    Father and son held each other close. Only three members remained of the ancient Dragonblood Clan in this era. When would this decaying clan be able to regain the glory and honor it had in prior years? At this moment, lying against his fathers chest, Linleys fists were clenched tightly!

    CHAPTER 3 - END
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    Quote Originally Posted by Ren Wo Xing View Post
    The thing is, the CULTURE side of this story? Definitely Chinese. In the next chapter, you're going to see an ancestral hall with spirit tablets. Definitely a Chinese only thing. Honestly, I want to say that the author wanted to make it feel western-y by using some Western names, but since he wasn't raised/grown up in the west, many of the concepts/cultural aspects of it are still Chinese-y. So it makes it feel a bit weird at times.

    Long story short, I agree with you for the most part, but for some things such as country names, there's no such country as either 'Finley' OR 'Fenlai' in the Western world, so I'll just stick with Fenlai.
    In real life, it's common to find the descendants of immigrants (sometime after hundred of years) have lost the language, but retained some cultural practices. Maybe this Baruch clan ancestors came from China, who knows?

    Anyway for this novel, I think English names are more appropriate than Chinese, that includes places' names (unless when it's in China and Chinese people names). It's just my 2 cents though.

    It's a fantasy novel, so a lot of places' names would be a fabricated ones. But I think Fenlai might be inspired from Finland. In 2006, October 24th, in movie theaters across China, there was a Finnish movie called Jadesoturi (English: Jade Warrior, Chinese: 玉战士; pinyin: 'Y zhnsh') being played. I haven't watched it, so I don't know much, but maybe the movie inspired the author to write this novel.

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