A draft version of my fanfic, trying to get some ideas about the story before i write the final draft. Spinoff of HSDS by jin yong. So if you could tolerate abundant grammar errors, and not offended by the fact that this is a spinoff; I would appreciate any comments or suggestions before i pen down my other ideas.
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The night was dark and not a sliver of light was seen for miles to come as the moon was hidden under the gauze of night. Thick layers of rain pelted down onto the grounds and tapped out a desolate tune for the late night travelers on the lonely road.
The carriage wheels races down the trail sending great puddles of muddy water flying through the air. A loud cough sounds from the interior of the carriage. “Young Master, we’ll arrive at shelter soon.” A thread of worry seeded itself in Young Cai’s mind as a long series of cough was his only answer. Young Cai’s whip flew down as he spurred the horses faster down the trail towards the distant glimmer of light.
Young Cai’s face lit up as his hopes were answered and the faint outline of an inn appeared against the dark backdrop of night. A pair of red lanterns hangs out front of the inn and glowed brilliantly upon the canvas of darkness beckoning the nightly travelers. The beckon of the siren.
Young Cai paid attention to nothing except the fact that shelter was in the distant as he sped the horses faster towards the inn. With a firm grip Young Cai pulls the horses to a full stop in front of the inn, “Young Master we’ve arrived.” Young Cai said with a jubilant voice as he dismounts from the driver’s seat and opens an umbrella for his young master.
A young man in his early twenties exited from the carriage, his face was slim and slender. The man was in his prime but his complexion was as pale as a ghost and it was almost like he was glowing as the paleness of his skin contrasted with the night’s darkness. A series of cough racked Li Yang’s frail body as he found shelter under the umbrella of Young Cai.
Young Cai rubbed his hand against his young master’s back, as the coughing subsided. Li Yang tipped his head in an unspoken gesture of gratitude as he exited from the carriage and took his first step towards the waiting inn. Li Yang lifted his head and his eyes ran across the words on the overhanging sign, “White Crane Inn.”
Li Yang’s eyes cleared and shined like with the brightness of the moon as the name of the inn registered in his mind. His eyes immediately darted to the dual banks on either side of the inn. Thin rays of light glimmered and shined on both banks and slowly the lights converged to from a sketchy line across the dark sea line. “Young Cai, as always you’ve chose the most suitable shelter for the night.”
“Young Master there is no other inn for miles to come, and it wouldn’t be beneficial for your health to travel another night on the road.” Little Cai protested.
A queer smile graced Li Yang’s lips, “ No matter,” Li Yang commented lightly as he walked along the short road towards the Inn, “After all what better place is there to witness a storm then at the eye of it.”
“Storm,” Young Cai said flabbergasted, “But the rain storm should clear up by morning it shouldn’t impede our travel, Young Master.” Young Cai pushed opened the huge door and cleared a path for his master.
Li Yang smiled broadly, “the rainstorm is ending. But a storm of unknown proportion that has brewed for the past 3 years has just reached its peak.” Li Yang said as he entered the rowdy inn and Young Cai followed closely by totally confused with the words of his master.