Legend of the Kilin (Mo-hup fan fic #1)

[Suet Seung]

Kara: My fanfic is called, "Legacies of Secrets", I will have many secrets, betrayal, twist and turns....I am working on some martial arts figures. The only thing I can tell you is Cheung Mo Kei and Chiu Man are making a special guest appearance but they are not the star of the story.... <IMG SRC="smilies/tongue.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/biggrin.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/redface.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/smile.gif" border="0">

[Swordmaster87]

<IMG SRC="smilies/read.gif" border="0"> Wow this topic is soooo long, I haven't been able to finish up to this point yet, I've only got to page 5. But the story's really good, keep up the good work. <IMG SRC="smilies/wink.gif" border="0">

[CrazyT]

Kara: don't worry, I don't plan on killing anyone anytime soon. But I just want to ask something. Xiao Lung Er is around 16-17 but at the beginning, I believe Yuen Jin is describe to be in his late 20s. That's a big age difference don't you think? Although it doesn't really matter that much in the wuxia world I guess.

[Suet Seung]

CrazyT: Please do not kill off Leung Tin Bo(Luong Thien Bao), Ah Lan , Ah Yee and Lau Hong either!!! You don't want people going after you for murdering off their fave character...especially knowing how crazy in love she is with the character Lau Hong...ehheheh <IMG SRC="smilies/kiss.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/laugh2.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/laugh2.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/wave.gif" border="0">

[Suet Seung]

I meant Goofy...is crazy in love with Lau Hong hahah <IMG SRC="smilies/drool.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/tongue.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/rolleyes.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/biggrin.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/redface.gif" border="0">

[Goofy]

Actually I'm in love w/ Ling Hu Chong and Jackie Lui, but I will settle as having LHC as my dad since I don't want to hurt Ren Ying Ying's feeling. <IMG SRC="smilies/biggrin.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/tongue.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/wink.gif" border="0">

[Goofy]

Many girls do marry early in those days and a lot are paired with older men. I don't think it makes any different.

[Suet Seung]

Goofy: Where are you now? You just posted twice and hasn't post anything else today! Are you continuing the fanfic here? What are you doing now? Ahahah! I'm just rewatching Xiao Ao Jiang Hu 96'....

I watched this other series that has Jackie Lui called Dreams Come True with Jessica and he looks so ugly in there...like his skin complexion was very bad...i wonder why...anyways...I just love rewatching stuff now....since there isn't anything out there good as these old ones.. <IMG SRC="smilies/biggrin.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/azzangel.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/smokin.gif " border="0">

[Goofy]

Too bad he is not in many of ancient series because I don't watch modern dramas. He is a very good actor though not very handsome (huh, too bad). He can be a convincing villain too like in Great General (ATV - look in spcnet review). I think he has great chemistry w/ Joey Man, so I guess I will just admire them from afar. <IMG SRC="smilies/biggrin.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/tongue.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/wink.gif" border="0">

Sorry - too much OT here. <IMG SRC="smilies/smile.gif" border="0">

[Goofy]

WhiteKrane, why don't you add something? I don't have any new <IMG SRC="smilies/idea.gif" border="0"> right now, but will wait for update. <IMG SRC="smilies/biggrin.gif" border="0">

[Suet Seung]

Goofy: Yeah I've seen him in Great General with Joey Meng. He was great playing two different roles..he may not look hott like Louis but I think he's handsome...he was great in that series with Joey...I thought the ending for them was very appropriate...I mean he regained his memory and was going about his evil self but in the end....he died along with her...how sad yet so romantic!

I would add something but I'm outta ideas as well...maybe some newbies should try...but don't go killing off some important characters!

[Swordmaster87]

Well, if no one's posting, let me try to continue. And I won't kill of the character, the person just falls of a cliff. <IMG SRC="smilies/smile.gif" border="0">
<IMG SRC="smilies/typin.gif" border="0"> in process
Hope I don't mess up the storyline.

[Swordmaster87]

"Long Er, Long Er" Yu Mei's maid cried as she looks around the place for Long Er. "Where are you, Long Er, mistress is in trouble."
Long Er heard the cried and quickly ran to the maid.
"What happen?"
"Some enemy attack mistress and now she's hanging off of a cliff, please help her." the maid cried.
"Of course, I will help her, show me the way."

The two reached the cliff and Xiao Long Er saw her martial sister hanging off of the cliff.
"Long Er, help me" Yu Mei shouted.
"Yu Mei Jie Jie, how can anyone defeat you, you are so good at your martial arts skills?"
"They threw poison needles at me and now I'm poison, help me please Long Er"
"Let's get you up first, Jie Jie"
Long Er then went to the cliff and pulls her jie jie up. To her surprise, Yu Mei flew up into the air and pushes her off the cliff with the Ice and Fire Palm.
"Aaaah." Xiao Long Er screams and hangs for her dear life at the edge of the cliff.
"Jie Jie, why must you do this for."
"If it isn't for you, I will be the next leader of the our sect, but you, you had cost me that, and now you have to pay. If you're not here, the next leader would be me."
"I never wanted to be the leader"
"Oh really, that sweet tongue of yours would get you the throne, you know it will."
"Jie Jie, please help me up."
"Make sure she falls off the cliff"Yu Mei said coldly ask she walks away from Long Er.
"Yes, ma'am." The maid said and then went over to the cliff.
"I'm sorry, Long Er, but I have to follow my mistress' order or she'll kill me"the maid whispers to Long Er as she trampled on Long Er's hand to make her lose her grip.
Long Er then let out a piercing scream as she falls down the cliff.
As the maid was turning around, she was met with a hard bang in her chest, Yu Mei had used the Dragon Palm to attack her maid.
"Noooooooooo," her maid scream as she falls down the cliff,"why are you doing this to me, mistress."
"It's gotta be that way, I have to make sure that no one knows about this."Yu Mei walks away smiling.
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So what do you think?

[Suet Seung]

SwordMaster87: Pretty good. Alot of dialogue and action...yet still short...anyone else gonna continue...I'm busy the rest of the night...somebody continue? <IMG SRC="smilies/help.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/smokin.gif " border="0">

[Swordmaster87]

I just like the story with more dialogues in it.

Long Er then let out a piercing scream at she falls down the cliff.

Jennifer, SC: can you change the word at to as. The sentence is almost at the end of my post.

[CrazyT]

I won't be able to continue the story for a while. Have tests and quizzes and essays to try and complete. Maybe on the weekend I'll have time to think of some plot.

[charbydis]

Can you make Long Er lose her memory? And the maid doesn't die, but neither Long Er nor Li Yu Mei knows it, and she can tell Long Er's godfather in the end! <IMG SRC="smilies/azzangel.gif" border="0">

[charbydis]

The cresent moon that was hanging in the centre of numerous twinkling stars, shone soft rays that reflected off the large lake onto the side wall of teh Sword Lake Sect. Two troops of guards were patroling all of the courtyards as Cheung Chi Xue had ordered the security to be increased to a maximum. It was all too embarassing for so many people breaking into the Sword Lake Sect. If any more broke in, it would surely damage the reputation of the sect.

One troop entered into the Camellia Courtyard and the two gurads that were at the lead motioned the others to stop as two tall shadows could be seen hidng behind the stone wall.

The men slowly approached the two figures with the lightest tread they could perform, and suddenly jumped in front of the two men, with their swords brandished, cornering them with the wall.

To their relief, it was only two of the guards from the other troop of security, who had separated from the rest of teh group to relieve themselves.

But just as their fear was gone, a soft but sharp whistle rang in their ears. And they turned in fright, in the direction of the whistle.

It is just my attempt at the round robin. if you deme this as inappropiate, you may delete this.
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[Suet Seung]

Charbydis: It's fine. Infact, if we you join the round robin it will only make the story more and more better with you're experience of writing one already. I really wish there would be more posting of this fanfic..I am getting bored....hehhe..I should really concentrate on writing my own fanfic right now...heheh....alrite! I am waiting for you all to write some more.... <IMG SRC="smilies/azzangel.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/drool.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/wink.gif" border="0"> <IMG SRC="smilies/biggrin.gif" border="0">

[Goofy]

This is a roundrobin fanfic, so it is disrespectful if any post to be deleted. I think it's a good foundation for anyone who might want to continue it. <IMG SRC="smilies/smile.gif" border="0">